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The aphrodisiac Galapagos Islands (> nice/catchy title!)

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The island is located in the Pacific Ocean and [add a subject] belongs to the country of Ecuador. 
[definite determiner is missing] Island of Galapagos is more known for very people (>These are basic grammar problems).

 

WHERE IS THE CATCHY QUESTION? (example. will you miss it?)


On the island there was one of the biggest turtles in the world, but now it is extinct (not relevant to sell the destination, right?) . Can you see very types of (BASIC GRAMMAR THAT WILL NOT PASS) animals like the sea lions, penguins, etc.
The weather is perfect to spend the night on the beach, it is very tropical.
It is a very pretty place to visit. (linking idea between these sentences?)
On the place you can stay with spectacular views of the sea, with beautiful cabins, very quiet and comfortable (order of adjectives: beautiful, quiet, comfortable cabins..) .
The island offers several places to enjoy a variety of restaurants that offer different typical dishes of the country, with first class chefs and excellent service.
Come here and feel like you are in paradise!!!
You must go to visit the island (THIS SOUNDS REPETITIVE).
If you visit the island you will help to contribute to care of the place.
Is it a perfect place to travel with your family.

 







                                                                                                                 Paulette López

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