INDIA, A LIFE-CHANGING EXPERIENCE- CORRECTIONS BY MARIA

 Group: Anna Jumilla i Xènia Mir

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. Apt catchy title : )

. to be on your list (choice of preposition)

. Comma missing after diversity 

- 'other than that > separate this from the previous sentence (which is too long) by a dot '.'.  

. Add a catchier (more persuasive) subtitle after each heading (like 'cuisine', for instance: 'cuisine: a must')

. 'their dishes' > unclear antecedent of the pronoun 'their'. > re-write  

 . check "we recommend you" (structure/grammar collocation)

. I plenty recommend 

GENERALLY, GOOD JOB!!!!!!! 






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CANCUN-CORRECTED with coloured comments by maria

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  Feedback maria: INFO missing Problems with content Problems with grammar, vocabulary spelling/orthography   this is the best advert I have seen so far! congrats! very carefully worked-on and planned. great!   CANCUN The authentic paradise for the youth Gorgeous beaches, rich gastronomy and exotic parties. Are you going to miss it? Cancun is one of the most visited countries in the world.  It has everything: ancient monuments, tasty food, luxurious hotels, white sand beaches, etc. What's more, entertainment is guaranteed day and night.   TROPICAL CLIMATE We recommend travelling between December and March to enjoy to the maximum your trip to Cancun. The weather is usually hot but with refreshing breezes that create an ideal climate . It can rain strongly in some seasons but don't worry about it. The rains are very short, therefore, your perfect beach day won’t be spoiled. Delfines Beach COMFORTABLE ACCOMMODATION Cancun has the perfect accommo...
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MALDIVES corrected by maria

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Maldiv a s (!!!!!) Feedback maria: INFO missing Problems with content Problems with grammar, vocabulary spelling/orthography   Names of the students in this group?  Maldives a paradise within your reach (catchy title :)!) 23 de septiembre del 2021 > ENGLISH!! Where is the introductory paragraph summarising most of the info (and providing a picture of) the place + a catchy questions persuading the reader?   Angaga Island resort and spa This beautiful and immense group of islands is made up of more than a thousand small islands, located in southern India. Its tropical and humid climate, its beautiful white sand beaches, its calm and crystalline waters and it's (this shall be a pronoun, like the other 'its') almost virgin natural landscapes, make this group of wonderful islands a full-fledged (weird collocation) tropical paradise , a true paradise (repeated) , above all, for those who love the sea, beaches and water sports MAAFUSHI: Maafushi is the jewel in th...
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Galápagos-CORRECTED BY MARIA

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Feedback maria: INFO missing Problems with content Problems with grammar, vocabulary spelling/orthography     The a phro disiac Galapagos Islands (> nice/catchy title!)   (   Provide a title for this picture + the name of the place it illustrates The island is located in the Pacific Ocean and [add a subject] belongs to the country of Ecuador.   [definite determiner is missing] Island of Galapagos is  more known  for  very people (>These are basic grammar problems).   WHERE IS THE CATCHY QUESTION? (example. will you miss it?) On the island there was one of the biggest turtles in the world, but now it is extinct (not relevant to sell the destination, right?) . Can you see very types of (BASIC GRAMMAR THAT WILL NOT PASS) animals like the sea lions, penguins, etc. The weather is perfect to spend the night on the beach, it is very tropical. It is a very pretty place to visit. (linking idea between these sentence...
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