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PARIS: Perfect lovely birds destination


Paris is well-known for being the city of lovers. You can find a variety of romantic, charming parks where you will feel like you are in a fairytale with your lover. The mouth-watering cuisine and the historic buildings are not far from the Eiffel Tower,the Louvre Museum or Versailles Palace. What more could anyone want?(can you please use a sentence not seen in class? thanks!)


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If you want to enjoy a delightful meal in one of the top restaurants in Paris with a Michelin star, that would be Le Pré Catelan, it’s rooms are very chic and very splendid.


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Have you ever had the opportunity of going to sleep (sounds like a literal translation from Cat/Spanish) with the striking views of the Eiffel Tower illuminated just in front of you? Now you can make this dream come true by staying at the marvellous Résidence Charles Floquet which is actually located just 50 metres far from La Dame de Fer.
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Theme Parks

Not only it can be a good trip for couples, if you have children that (auxiliary verb missing; basic grammar) like having fun, going to Disneyland Paris is a must for you. They will feel close to their favourite characters, and they will be able to live an unforgettable experience that you will be able to enjoy as much or more than them.


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“Paris is a lively and captivating city. I went there with my partner for a few days and this lush city made me feel like a princess. The cuisine and the alluring buildings enchant my partner and me. It is an excellent option to visit as a couple.” Emma Smith.














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